2 panels short
The Norm
Not a big fan of comics that you'll only be able to enjoy if you know the back story or the relationship between the characters. It's so damn self-indulgent. And this is a Sunday standalone so it's doesn't even have the excuse of leading into a storyline.
Let's try and add a panel or two to improve this:
6. Norm: Why? Is this because Ford told me he'd thought you'd gained weight?
Jan: No. What? Ford?!
Ford: Norm!
7. Norm: What? I didn't say anything about how you called her a know it all.
Ford: Norm!
See? Not exactly hysterical, but I wrote it in under a minute. So I've taken the last panel that Jantze wrote and added two panels to actually prove her panel 5 point. And ... you wouldn't have to know anything about any of the characters to read it and appreciate it. Unless you're at the point in your career where you're Peanuts or Calvin, I'd think every day of your comic should be able to be read on a standalone basis.
Thank you and good morrow,
-Melange
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2 comments:
I don't really agree with you there. I also know nothing about this comic, but I think this one is easy enough to understand:
The first guy is having some existential angst, feels like opening up, maybe close to some sort of emotional breakthrough, when his friend Norm suddenly appears and ruins the opportunity. Even knowing nothing else, you can easily infer from the context that they do this to each other all the time: sabotage any attempts at personal growth.
It's not that funny, but it does make sense. Your added panels miss the original point of the comic, I feel.
I agree with the original post, you're making all kinds of assumptions and I think that is the author's point. You shouldn't have to struggle to connect the dots, the cartoonist should be making it easier and funnier.
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